hello oneohseven.i am postin abt our freaking LA hmwrk.Phoebe has "stepped out" to help us.below is e email content by her:the main trouble is the SPECS/SLIMS thingy.
which is what I'm typing now.
DO CHANGE THE VOCAB USED, THOUGH NOT ALL, BECAUSE IT IS RECOGNISABLY MY TYPE.
SPECS
Subject Matter:
trying to convey the message of the unjust way or the treatment of Negros through the experience of owning the Gold Cadillac.
Purpose of message:1. (main) owning a exquisite car is not everything, yet owning an ordinary car isn't a shame.
--------the gold Cadillac broke the family apart, the Ford pulled them back together-------
2. to enlighten the readers about the unfair dealings of blacks in America then
Emotion/mood:
1. angry: at the lousy treatment of blacks as thought they were dirt on the ground
(Father maligned for stealing the Cadillac when he bought it with his efforts,
signs posted everywhere on the streets to emphasise the segregation of skin colour of the people.)
2. sympathy: will feel sorry for the Negros who received such an unjustified treatment just because they were born black.
Craftmanship/Technique:
SLIMS
Summary:Just copy everything from above written (all SPE, except C) as beginning to synthethise passage.
Then.
a. Impact?
full and good enough
cultivated enough feelings to do with the injustice, and author had conveyed the message thoroughly enough, and there
was sufficient emphasis.
b. successful in attempt?
yes, overall a marvelous work to see how
1. owning something exotic is not necessarily awful, owning something ordinary does have its own benefits as well.
2. the unjustified way to deal with blacks in America
this message brought out so thoroughly and clearly it brought forth anger and sympathy at the same time.
SLIMS:
available only when school reopens, first day.
unable to do.
ie. Structure?
limericks sonnets? haikus?
hello? we're talking about passages, text, and stories here, not poems, dude.
Robert and the Dog:
not completed,
available only when schools reopens itself,
but you can try on your own too.
Read the passage for content once.
Then let the idea driven sink in.
Ask yourself: What does the author want to tell me?
(In this case: Should a dog receive better treatment than a human, who in Robert's eyes is more superior?)
Slowly, follow the questions properly.
eg: Emotions
What would I feel as a third-party?
if I were Robert?
if I were his masters?
Then when summarising,
re-read the story once again, look out for flaws and small details, let the story sink in once more then re-look at it again.
Once you double-checked what you've got, then summarise the thing itself.
Ask yourself what the author wants to convey again, then judge it.
Is it successful?
Has he/she been talking nothing but crap, or driving in an idea strongly?
What did I get from this? What was the main gist, the focused idea?
Keep asking and driving, then judge it.
You finished your summary.
It's actually that simple but how you view it matters.
Seriously.
how "nicee".
thx Phoebe. i shall find out how to do it 2mr.
THX a million.im darned stupid.
Toodles, Jia Rui <3
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I EDITED IT PHOEBE.STOP COMPLAINING OKAEES. ==